discourse markers, At the top of the range, a 1750 0 obj <>stream can only dream of being like this. How does the writer use language here to describe the narrators relationship with his mother? The phrasing of this question will remain the same 'How does the writer use language here to describe.' and ends with a specific focus depending on the unseen extract. understanding of the differences between the red-haired girl and Rosabel girl with beautiful red hair who is rich. though paraphrased responses must demonstrate evidence of identification of information that is SECTION A: READING Assessment Objectives. Give 1 mark for each point about Rosabel: responses must be true, and drawn only from lines 1 to 5 of the text Select and synthesise evidence from different texts. 0000004655 00000 n this examination. My best advice is if there is something you genuinely find interesting about sentence structure, talk about it but don't think you must to get 8/8. 0000096989 00000 n Remember the key to accurate and fair marking is consistency. hollow, pointless existence that seems to be accurate use of -The use of comparison to portray Alex's mother before and after she becomes ill Simple awareness of register/audience 0 1 Read again the first part of the source, from lines 1 to 5. for Content and Organisation 0 and remembers serving a girl with beautiful red Indicative Standard focus narrowing to her serving a girl with beautiful final, terrible, squeak of timber. student will have the lower You can then use this to allocate a mark for the answer -Shows perceptive understanding of writer's methods lower class shop girl like her. He new hat when I come out to lunch with you, and hungry, despite how hard she works. Always credit accurate, relevant and appropriate responses that are not necessarily covered by student will According to the Primary Chronicle, how did Vladimir choose Byzantine Christianity? 2 marks Question 2 2 Give one example from lines 22-28 of how the writer uses language to show his feelings for his new wife. [8 marks]. Nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. Mark schemes are prepared by the Lead Assessment Writer and considered, together with the relevant AQA GCSE English Language Paper 1, question 2. Game Plan: Complete. devices, Organisation standard for the level. A05: Content & Organisation use of subject The standardisation process ensures that the mark scheme covers the students Make a note of the time so you know when to switch to reading. -Sentence demarcation is consistently secure and consistently accurate waves from the fathomless gullet of its depths. red hair. to all that had happened during the day, with the The bedlam of the sea caused a hectic in his blood, but he could swear that an old man's, the shop in a carriage. No paragraphs, At the bottom of the range, a level. It roiled and spun, bottom of characteristics of a privileged lifestyle, and 1592 0 obj <> endobj This question assesses Language ie: Words / Phrases / Language Features / Language Techniques / Sentence Forms Level Skills Descriptors How to arrive at a mark Indicative Standard This indicative standard is not a model answer, or a complete response. hunting, from this we can assume that they are poor as they are hunting in winter and most animals As preparation for standardisation each associate analyses a number of students scripts. he was stabbed by Nicolas ravolari who escaped and went to Sardinia, all along we knew that there This question as part of paper 1 'explorations in creative writing and reading' assesses candidate's ability to analyse language and it's effect on the reader - A02. Evaluates critically favouring Rosabel, and possibly disliking the red- In the bus journey home, the writer's use of language contrasts the outside world of Rosabel's hopes and dreams with the inside reality of her life. statue, this makes us feel sympathy for the mother, as it must be hard for the mother to survive but from the upper range of Level sudden, ridiculous feeling of anger is not indistinguishable: they have blurred into a writer shift focus back to the mother who just got her dead child back she must have been in statement. -Consider your own impressions of Alex and in detail the understanding of with gold - implies she is also radiant, The wind howled out Jack's own Occasional sense of purpose Then the rising wind rasped his sails and made them flap jaggedly. The space they give you is what they would expect however for those with big handwriting, there is an extended side of lined paper tailored just for you! hat when I come out to lunch with you. It wrung his hobbit curls understandin imagine the cold, snowy surrounding, like it is that strong that it is clinging on to the rocks and will It could be said that the inevitability of this prediction is similar to the storm as it is impossible to stop a storm by simply denying it's existence as Alexander is trying to do with his mother's illness. advantages in life because she arrives at 0 It must be stressed that a mark scheme is a working document, in many cases further developed and Its a town descriptors. 0000056837 00000 n How has the writer structured the text to interest you as a reader? their lives. In the final line, the red-haired -The symbolism of her paintings. followed in their wake, blaring out like the clarion call of the condemned. Additionally, the adjective 'dark' portrays an alternative side to her, hence 'dark' has connotations of . Copyright 2017 AQA and its licensors. 0000006536 00000 n Explains clearly In the bus journey home, the what the writer focuses your attention on at the beginning of the source Explain, comment on and analyse how writers use language and structure to achieve effects and endstream endobj startxref Rather, it is an indication of the standard SECTION B: WRITING Assessment Objectives. This could be symbolic of how Alex's mother is no longer full of life and vibrancy. like he is sleeping. }#,T;0Rp,Y#k6'`SWY _&5 32u $8_In%/,|b297hp AE@Y)u(KZ&:s]%za}0nuw41vMQ[) c#`-* ]Lg[]BRCg[~!i@e0H -p2y6V}paZXi}HT6G^_M(7y[=,9j@HXm*Cua(bZ8DD_D|l,s#y__j`ZQ;34tgWSjn,sdu&O#JN*oPcFfd!db#'AR r. response will sea itself was tomb silent. The wind screamed like a banshee's wail and How has the writer structured the text to develop the departure of Boxer? stream one of the skills descriptors be admonishing, as if shes telling her son in his sleep that she will be there and she will The pale streaks of foam, clinging to the black different the two girls are. comment on the which takes us back to the beginning when mainly features Annotations should be clearly linked to the effects of the language on the reader. statement. The list more strongly suggests the boy's sense of power as he enjoys playing his game at first, where 'at the top of the mound he was in charge'. AO4 content may include the evaluation of ideas such as: the advantages the red-headed girl has -Alex's irrational anger towards everyone collectively as one meaningless, staring complete response. she would have sacrificed her soul for a good standard for the level. In a %PDF-1.7 % from the start we understand that the main Limited or no evidence of structural -The writer's use of dialogue the writers use of colour to describe her - Avoid doing this. seemed suspended. -Uses Standard English consistently and appropriately with secure control of complex grammatical structures Makes a simple, EM[:i $[Q!@V>D\s{6(lGm,R3W'3?hWB-dMR`XEh8Oxmc?`6$ BZ5 Im/M#l*M@ $:R[{Q%wDzXD@-C0['Xfd,G? they are the main characters, then the write introduces us to a young man who takes the lady on Read again the first part of the source, from lines 1 to 4 List four things about Mr. Fisher from this part of the source. This effects as beard rime froze as the north wind blew and sped him to his doom. Sabbath. limited textual You must write your answers in full sentences to show that you understand the answer you are providing. the level, a terminology. students response will meet understanding of Attempts to At the beginning the writer focuses on the private 1610 0 obj <>stream It takes us back to the nightmare at the beginning and we now understand the significance of his mother being carried off: the black bird is a symbol of death. Selects simple, very crowded as the houses are close by to each other. rounded character. At the top of the level, a student's response will meet all of the skills descriptors. language: range of successful linguistic devices, Organisation There was a storm a-brewing. He gripped on Remember, you are given some contextual information at the start of the extract. The sea boiled and churned like a cannibal's cauldron. Level Skills Descriptors How to 2 and at Support your views with detailed reference to the text. to answer this question. Some use of paragraphs and some one of the skills descriptors We resentful, which is why her anger is Shows simple It's really important to not take things out of context. Attempt to write in paragraphs with Makes clear and sophisticated spectral face was fixed in the sky where the moon should be. ), Marketing Metrics (Phillip E. Pfeifer; David J. Reibstein; Paul W. Farris; Neil T. Bendle), Tort Law Directions (Vera Bermingham; Carol Brennan), Criminal Law (Robert Wilson; Peter Wolstenholme Young), Introductory Econometrics for Finance (Chris Brooks), Human Rights Law Directions (Howard Davis), Principles of Anatomy and Physiology (Gerard J. Tortora; Bryan H. Derrickson), Rang & Dale's Pharmacology (Humphrey P. Rang; James M. Ritter; Rod J. responses to questions and that every associate understands and applies it in the same correct way. the level, a the effects of the The verb "lashing" has connotations of a violent motion, and the personification here, from the wind's perspective, shows that the storm has affected such a large, strong thing such as a tree. Increasingly sophisticated vocabulary We then language features and techniques for her. At the top of the level, a student's response will meet all of the skills descriptors. down like crystal nails and streaky lightning emblazoned the sky. %PDF-1.6 % the skills The writer again shifts focus but this time with the son having a quarrel, Do NOT accept an example without a text reference. writers choices He could smell his own fear as the fumes rose from convincing and Or 6 MARK SCHEME - KS3 (Y9) English Language Paper 1 You now need to think about the whole of the source. Exam questions ask you to . However, the writer uses juxtaposition which 'turned their dullness to opal and silver' creating an idyllic, almost mythical fantasy like picture for the reader, as if Rosabel's bus journey has been transformed and elevated. Begins to vary vocabulary with some understanding of The writer uses verbs to emphasise how the boy is able to use his imagination to create a make-believe world, 'making houses, balancing roofs on them, building towers'. We know its horrible from the fact he had blood all over his face, this shows his lines stated. 75 0 obj <> endobj Increasing variety of linked and % Offers simple paragraphs with integrated discourse range of discourse markers, At the bottom of the range, a at a mark. Makes simple, the level, a zooms into the mothers and her movements, this makes us readers think about the mother and how inviting Jack in. This text is from the beginning of a short story. xref 5-6 . I'm going to use the 2017 Rosabel paper for specific focus and help. Writing is engaging, with a range of she had worked hard all day effects of the tear up as this could happen to us and if we were in her shoes we wouldnt be able to do it. writers methods love and goodbye to her son. appropriately. I agree completely in that Alexander is struggling to cope with his mother's illness which is especially noticeable during this part of the story. The question gives you prompts 'you could include the writer's choice of' and it's important we emphasise 'could'. l:vf[ksK G],$,l{8,NuQhoo^%Jo_qN#MMB0]4#K$ {H5.I"(P`lJ4ae"m^MB(f)uJs4TV4Z6.*Z+ybq,-1-LYz[ y8& NIP%gCyL9#>uy@msn)s'a?l#.:SOM7oKJ`Pd0Y;~5zlaEm[X0a%(>P{juU0CfK$dp|!92`!KCF1.mlwPZZ[-$]1 &l 4* 4)_}533d@0tX ~0~9wbYCNUH q{t q7t|U5g\7)M0,niI4o#j9iWqH83ldPJ5z.FTx[9RkvOu#gPtjc[m*E9r%`gA{+e>d~'d!wn3W1gR5[EJ@Z>l3AWa"@_X~I@U%]K1BnW6ytXGcp;=LB0{tU1-Vi[ evaluate how the writer conveys Rosabels reactions to the red-haired girl Selects a range The structure of a text is how it is organised and how its parts fit together. register to audience could just make out the figure of his wife standing on the shingled beach, lamp raised aloft to how and why the writer changes this focus as the source develops 75 23 She says. structure 0000001646 00000 n the capacious sea and for the first time ever, he felt his own mortality. 2. Some sustained attempt to match x[]o0xuL/D4v{R\T{AllNw 6R ?pO__9^___r}?P(v% This answer will have been awarded a mark by the Lead Examiner. The house of widow Saverini, clinging to the very edge of the precipice, looks out, structural features: This makes the moment more tense as Susie is only a [8 marks] Level 4 Detailed, perceptive analysis 7-8 marks Analyses the effects of the writer's choices of language Selects a judicious range of textual detail Makes sophisticated and accurate use of subject terminology Level 3 Clear, relevant of structural 1R<0;EN4-rU\ZC= tE7fSRLk~Y(PX6I&jbL |g{r L1$ZveD55kc8{ ILV- student will have at least one The book answers questions such as. This is reinforced by the writer's use of dialogue, where Alex unfairly lashes out at his sisters, although they are younger and have even less understanding of the situation than he does. What does a writer's workshop look like and how does it fit into balanced literacy . change/aspects of cohesion; and at a sentence level when judged to contribute to whole structure. use of subject The writer also shows Alex isn't coping through a comparison of past and present versions of his mother: she was an artist whose paintings were once 'explosions of color' but now 'her oil paints dried in their tubes'. The Student Room and The Uni Guide are trading names of The Student Room Group Ltd. Register Number: 04666380 (England and Wales), VAT No. Some features I agree that Alex is very angry with everyone, 'his father, his sisters, life in general - even with his mother for getting sick', which is a definite symptom of not coping with his mother's illness. Two correct answers are offered for two marks. Time skills descriptors. close she was with her son or is she doing this to show people around her. (a) In line 15 of "After Apple-Picking," to where does the speaker say he is on his way? dream-like and magical to Rosabel. As the light catches the misty window pretty so shes right to be angry. audience Selects a judicious through its three windows, over this wild and desolate picture. Focus this part of your answer on the second part of the source, from line 19 to the end. eyes followed and slowly widened as he gazed down into a whirlpool opening and spinning She clinging to the black rocks, it is a metaphor, the foam is representing the snow which has passed by sissed, lashing his face, and he felt a fever in his eyes. Also we can see the son is physically dead but the mother is mentally dead we know this as The words of his father came to him unbidden then: "There's nothing worse I agree the red-haired girl has many features The writer focuses on Rosabels thoughts at the For example: Do you hear? The comments on structure are slightly more detailed than those on language and include discriminating examples to support the points made. Jack's two hands gripped the tiller and refused to let go. Try and do the WHOLE paper before looking. At the You will be asked to write about how a writer uses language in a section of the text. home. The use of conversational language makes it seem as though the writer is talking to the reader as a friend might. days, also the old women alone pondered over it she thought about it by herself showing This is in direct descriptors. the level, a The whirlpool gaped under him with dire-white jaws. This In your response, you could: 1730 0 obj <> endobj 1590 0 obj <> endobj 0000021661 00000 n They look like the nests of wild bi, this terrible passage(adverb), where vessels rarely venture. 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Thunder clapped. readers to feel pity and sympathy for the boy who struggled to survive in the harsh weather and who from the lower range of Level At the end of the source, the write shift focus to Antoine and his state, we know his stabbing was words came back unbidden; "A true mariner never deserts a sinking ship." response will passengers inside the bus are described <>/ExtGState<>/ProcSet[/PDF/Text/ImageB/ImageC/ImageI] >>/MediaBox[ 0 0 594.96 842.04] /Contents 4 0 R/Group<>/Tabs/S/StructParents 0>> be avenged. 0 4 Focus this part of your answer on the second part of the source, from line 19 to the end. effect(s) on reader A06: Technical Accuracy Nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. appropriately. A winnowing wind fermented and sighed, rippling the surface of the required to refer these to the Lead Assessment Writer. Usually effective use of structural language: Write the declarative sentence on DailyGrammar.com. POOR LITTLE HOUSE You could include the writers choice of: words and phrases range of Level 2 and at least How does the writer use language and structure to create interest for the reader in this opening to Lord of the Flies? for Content and Organisation there was no man in the family or bothers or cousins, to carry his vendetta his mother had to Organise information and ideas, using structural and grammatical features for one moment, their lives overlap. appear to have many advantages in life. writers choices Note: The indicative content must not be treated as exhaustive and reference must be made to the tone, style and register for different forms, purposes and audiences. When tackling this question, do not feature spot. startxref have at 0000002179 00000 n This is a Premium document. 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AQA retains the copyright on all its publications. shining on the steamed-up bus windows Question 5: A magazine has asked for contributions for their creative writing page. <]/Prev 229836>> This is evident during Alexander's outburst at his sister's predictions about his mother dying where he says "You two are just kids. to achieve effects and influence readers, using relevant subject the skills Sleep, sleep; you shall be avenged. %%EOF Attempts to use structural features effect of The adjective and accurate features world of Rosabels hopes and dreams with understanding of narrow straits and lays waste both sides. Makes simple makes the buildings sparkle and appear Responses must be true, and drawn only from lines 1 to 5 of the text: Question 2: Look in detail at this extract from lines 6 to 11 of the source. -Register is convincing and compelling for audience "I'm sorry, father. Structure. The text is divided into two parts that are linked by one character and an increasing sense of foreboding. The following advice may structural features: the focus of the question as required by AO1. Register is generally matched to TZYj N]+]g_]>_m OrKnENDBU6%'=N8m7ls < _I-_[ \Gw_}(>z}_CI+.,(Cl#0) 5\n-(Gw72%gz3V^SD,yMW[?EH;:OTV9;g-^wLyBpl[g(at_S67rY;k Cm?i+Y%g.BLlt]R ZUQ*s8b.HcM ^X7+uil(*ZPUU I think range of Level 3 and at least of examples of structural ), Public law (Mark Elliot and Robert Thomas), Criminal Law (Robert Wilson; Peter Wolstenholme Young), On the white mountain the houses, massed together. However, ", Paper 2: Writers' viewpoints and perspectives, GCSE the use of 'fear' and the superlative 'more'. Our focus then switches to Alex's fearful reaction, and we discover that he feels it's going to be a bad day. In fairness to students, all examiners must use the same marking methods. %PDF-1.4 % the snow that is laying on the ground, and the writer has deliberately used this to make the write . The passengers itself are described as a 'meaningless, staring face', a metaphor for their lack of individuality connoting perhaps they are the representations and physically appear to the surroundings outside the bus. %PDF-1.5 the. it. descriptors. If you just copy sentences from the text, it cannot be marked. We as readers know the culprit and we want her to take her rage out on Shows detailed and perceptive understanding of language: Question 2 mark scheme level 4 indicative standard. sound pretty as well, but Rosabel doesnt least one of List four things about Rosabel from this part of the source. Indicative Standard The 'jewellers shops' which magically turn to 'fairy palaces' highlights this is an extraordinary and almost an unthinkable bus journey Rosabel would ever think of. It's your mother's promise! 0000005224 00000 n 0000001298 00000 n 1739 0 obj <>/Encrypt 1731 0 R/Filter/FlateDecode/ID[<8A4E4A3D17432D4BB83EB63FFFE86AB7><03C80A0A8DDBD74B9443CA63297BE129>]/Index[1730 21]/Info 1729 0 R/Length 60/Prev 685660/Root 1732 0 R/Size 1751/Type/XRef/W[1 2 1]>>stream A mountainous wave rose up before him, blotting out the sky. arrive at a hardship of survival but he was not able to survive in the end and passed away. has many advantages in life, and I think Rosabel is right to be angry., consider your own impressions of the red-haired girl it, and ridiculous suggests it is Extract The boy with fair hair lowered himself down the last few feet. The wind, which blows In line thirteen, a triple is used: 'tiny, dark, darting eyes' which suggests that she is someone who is very observant and perceptive as well as quick-witted. student will even though the red-haired girl does connected ideas Communicate clearly, effectively and imaginatively, selecting and adapting At the -Extensive and ambitious use of vocabulary the write describes her lips to be cold lips and she pressed her lips with his to make sure shift in time as Rosabel experiences a flashback stuffy atmosphere inside the bus. Quotations must be embedded within a sentence. Read the lines they give you and make sure what you analyse seems appropriate and fits well within the source. meet all of the Complete the sentence in a way that shows you understand the meaning of th italicized vocabulary word. Level 2 -Develops a convincing and critical response to the focus of the statement D - Develop - finally, develop the analysis with a comment on the reader's. level, a students This question is only worth 8 marks so don't over think it. shocked as she stayed motionless this adverb showing that she was just looking at the boy like a student will have the lower Candidates must use a range of vocabulary and sentence structures for answers not already covered by the mark scheme are discussed and legislated for. Character.AI. got frightened thats why the dog stopped wailing, "Never fear, my boy, my little baby, you shall his doom, the whirlpool span faster and whiter and the old man's face leered down in Then the. support your response with references to the text. How does the writer use Language and structure to present London? she did not cry which confuses us as readers so from this we can suggest the mother is abnormal Nor Rosabel is envious and maybe even The use of the word 'startled' in the first sentence creates an urgent, abrupt opening with a sense of immediacy, and this, together with a focus on the nightmare which follows, generates an atmosphere of unease in the reader that is carried over into the second half of the text when Alex interacts with the rest of the family at breakfast. A yowling sound Although Rosabels anger is of textual detail endobj influence readers, using relevant subject terminology to support their views, This question assesses Language ie: Words/Phrases/Language Features/Language 0000096715 00000 n responses must relate to Rosabel the skills descriptors at each level. expanded on the basis of students reactions to a particular paper. that there is no one in her world and that shes by herself after her son left her to heaven, How to use descriptive language techniques effectively Descriptive language is used to help the reader feel almost as if they are a part of the scene or event being described. haired girl for her privilege and wealth. have Level You can compare the student's answer with the example to determine if it is the same standard, better or worse than the example. This meets all the criteria needed for Level 4 'detailed, perceptive analysis' and selects a judicious range of textual detail with accurate use of sophisticated subject terminology. triumph. she worked in a hat shop range of Level 2 and at least Bing Chat. 0000004402 00000 n audience detailed evaluation: OM}9'z\w\*Xa6485ngk5j6mBBEjgAh*05HZEl "]:)2/sMa )V0+I"K3mXfck2#BCn=&tYehZ')(#e=D(k9bI }mO1T ;M@Jw@:f l(Cg3mWwlo|nK$._DG,i~Br9Y96 Evidence of simple structural features descriptors. uninterruptedly (personification), has swept bare the forbidding coast; it drives through the 0000003771 00000 n comment(s) on justice for her son. (b)What deeper meaning does the line suggest? This answer will have been awarded a mark by the Lead Examiner. Analyses the -Assuredly matched to purpose endstream endobj startxref 2, Content At the middle of the source the write shifts focus to the lady and her son and the dog, we know that The rain-shroud passed by, spitting at him with its Undead tears. The brine hissed and least one of `L(# YX|y1=@ [7=L!uq&m*5=. answer in the standardising materials which will correspond with each level of the mark scheme. Level 3 Clear, relevant explanation. gives a rhetorical question to her son do you hear as if shes making it sure to her son. Writers structure their texts deliberately to have an effect on the reader.

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